Loved the concept from the moment I read your summary, and it was fun to see how Sora reacted to all of the people he's spawned/sheltered. While there wasn't any closure on the conflicts brought up with his Others, it feels better that way. This story was about a journey, and we're left with the hope that Sora is going to manage to fix things, without being bogged down with the execution.
There were a lot of good things you did with your formatting, but there were some things that didn't quite work, as well. I loved the section with Anti-Sora, and the immersive feel you provided. Nice to see Sora shaken by it as well.
Very commonly throughout the fic, you'd use a period to indicate a pause/stutter when an ellipses would have conveyed your meaning a lot better. It kept throwing me out of the story as I tried to interpret what you were saying.
Out of curiosity, when little!Sora bumped his head there at the end, is it safe to assume the pain he was feeling there was his actual injury seeping through the dreamscape? It sort of felt like he was maybe feeling the tension surrounding him (such as Kairi's guilt) as well.
Overall, I enjoyed this story. Thanks for sharing! :)
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There were a lot of good things you did with your formatting, but there were some things that didn't quite work, as well. I loved the section with Anti-Sora, and the immersive feel you provided. Nice to see Sora shaken by it as well.
Very commonly throughout the fic, you'd use a period to indicate a pause/stutter when an ellipses would have conveyed your meaning a lot better. It kept throwing me out of the story as I tried to interpret what you were saying.
Out of curiosity, when little!Sora bumped his head there at the end, is it safe to assume the pain he was feeling there was his actual injury seeping through the dreamscape? It sort of felt like he was maybe feeling the tension surrounding him (such as Kairi's guilt) as well.
Overall, I enjoyed this story. Thanks for sharing! :)